Oct 032012
 

这次回大同看小孩,也就顺便了解一下老婆的表妹的学习情况,今年初二,说起英语作文,她说她的中国式英语作文,给老师扣掉了7分。

别的不行,辅导别人写英文作文,我还是比较牛逼的。

这位老师批评学生写的是中国式英语,其实如果让这位老师写作文,也肯定是中国式的英语。按照这位老师的教育,学生到高考,估计也不会如何写作文.其实这位老师, 很可能他也不会.

只要是中国人,自己写的英文,基本都是中国式。要避免中国式,就不要自己写,而是直接套用老外的格式。如何套用,那么就要参加曹老师的培训。

后来参加MBA培训,接受的曹其军的教育,以后也就再也不害怕英文作文,我也能指导别人如何写英文的作文。

曹其军给我们举了一个很贴切的例子,作文题:计划生育

拿到这个作文题,学生马上写的第一个句子就是,计划生育是我国的基本国策。基本国策,英文如何写呢?估计基本都写错。最恐怖的是:写完这句,后面写啥呢?

我相信就算英文8级的人,让他用英文对计划生育发表高论,估计都是很难高难度的活。那么这个作文题是考察啥,是考察我们对计划生育的看法还是我们的英文表达能力呢?显然是我们的英文表达能力。

曹老师的作文是大概如下

计划生育现在是一个非常热门的话题,无论的电台,电视,还是校园,大家都激烈讨论。对于计划生育,一部分人的观点是:

另外一部分人观点是

这两个观点,听起来都挺有道理的,不过我的观点是

看看下面这篇,就基本是这个套路完成的。对比作文。例如出国留学,早教,等。基本都是可以这样写。红色标记部分,是重点.

Is failure good or bad?

Failure is what often happens to a majority of people in this world. As is fairly well-known to us all, in particular those young and old people.

When it comes to the issue of failure there are always some debatable views from various people. A small group of people argue that failure is bad, and they offer some sound reason for their argument.     As we all know, it is far beyond any reasonable doubt that failure is bad.

There are always two sides with any one coin. On the other hand, it is widely held by a majority of people around me that failure is good, and some good arguments they give may be discussed in details below. The first point worth our concern is that China has carried out it’s policy of reform and opening-up. What’s more, as is well-known to us all, China entered WTO. Last but not the least, to tell the truth, China economy has been developing fact from technological progress based on advances in scientific knowledge. To put it in another way, failure is mother of success. Just as a popular saying goes in India, no failure, no success.

Based on what has been going on so far, it can be concluded that there is some truth in both views, but neither is telling the whole story. In my opinion, I prefer the second view to the first one. In other words, failure is good.

 

下面是曹老师的讲课内容,我有幸是听过2遍,真的很精彩,曹老师讲课,也不是按照大纲,即兴发挥。

内容是我从互联网copy下来,不过我真的是听课,听到的。

试作文杀招 之一
根据曹其军老师讲稿整理
总原则之一:
应试作文以又臭又长为好:臭——全是废话(改卷老师不会看你的内容的);长——是很多废话的堆积;所以,考研作文要写到280——300字为好。
总原则之二:
要有固定,漂亮的“外表”
分析历年试题,考研出题类型不外乎四种:(问题)单向类、(好现象)单向类、双向类、图表加前三种。
一、(问题)单向 格式总共是三段
段一:S1+S2+S3+S4+S5 (S——sentence)共5句话,一共60字左右,下面给出每句话可以套用的格式,这些漂亮的格式是一定要牢记和熟背的!
S1是介绍,固定格式有
1.The past few years(decades)have witnessed us (our society) faced with the issue of……
2. In recent years there has been a growing concern among the general public over the issue of……
3. Nothing can be more serious (upsetting ,outstanding, meaningful…) than the issue of……
S2+S3运用Flex 技巧进行扩展和包装,这些Flex 技巧在后面详细给出,要熟背!
运用statistics:
According to a recent survey made by Dr. Cao, head of sociology department at Beijing University,70%….;and 30%….(在此直接用数字,不要写英文,一般写两句随便给出两个数据足够)
S4 “同一份调查还表明…(又给出另一个数据)
The same survey also shows that +(又一数据)
S5 收尾,与S1呼应,“由此可见,…问题已经非常严重了”
It can be concluded, therefore, that the issue of……has become more and more serious (harmful).
段二:120——140字左右
开头:S1 : 10 words
1. To account for the above-mentioned phenomenon (issue,tendency), various reasons (causes) have been put forward.
2.The above problem (phenomenon) may well give rise to some effects (consequences) as follow.
S2+S3+S4: 50 words
开始列举了,但是千万不要用那些滥词:first,second,firstly,secondly,印象分会降低,要用些漂亮的词,尽可能用短语:
In the very beginning,
+S2
In the first place,
In the second place, In the end,
+S3 +S4
What is more, Last but
S2,S3,S4 在简单阐述了各自一个观点之后,就开始进行Flex扩展,扩展可运用Quotation 或是Example达到增加60——80字:
Quotation:
To illustrate the point, let’s take a look at what ……(President Cliton) said in an article :“。。。。”
所以,整个第二段是核心段,基本结构是:
开头S1(10字) + S2 扩展
S3 50字 扩展 共扩展60-80字
S4 扩展

段三(解决方法,suggestions) 100 words
S1 15 words
1.We should take immediate measures, for if the present situation continues as before, serious outcome will come up.
2. It is high time that (immediate measures be taken now.) (such a problem be put an end to.) (a reform be made.)
S2+S3+S4+S5+S6 100 words or so
S2 On one hand, we should urge our government to lay down stricter rules to forbid……
S3 Should anyone dare to break the law, he to she should be put into jail for 5 years.
S4 In addition , our government should put in more money to protect ( encourage) …….
S5 On the other hand, we should try every means to enhance the public awareness of the issue of…..
S6 Only through these measures, I firmly believe, will the above-discussed problem be efficiently resolved.

二、(好现象)单向类
段一 介绍 60 字
段二 分析 重要性原因(或结果 benefits)
做法
段三 结论(要重视)
段一 介绍
开头:Nothing can be more outstanding (meaningful ) than ……
接下来运用的扩展和(问题)单向类相同
段二 分析
(1)开头: The above phenomenon may well give rise to some benefits as follow.

(2) benefits 社会的
经济的
个人的
(3)做法
As the phenomenon is important ,we can approach it in the following ways.
接下来运用扩展技巧
段三 结论
重视 社会生活 (money, awareness)
个人生活 ( awareness,我的决心等等)
说明:该现象为较大类的,如 希望工程,就可以加上社会的重视;较小的如 交朋友,信念如明灯,就只用个人生活的做法。
开头:It goes without saying that due attention should be paid to the phenomenon.

三、双向类
(一) A1 VS A2 = contrast “对照”即是一个事物的两方面做比较,如看电视的利弊,出国留学等等,A1好,A2坏;或是A1坏,A2好;
(二)A VS B = compare 对比 即是两个事物做比较,如锻炼是跑步好还是做操好等,A B同好或是同不好
但是两种题型结构都是一样的,如下:
段一 摆擂台,展现“两”面
段二 回到A (A1)
单向分析 原因,或结果,重要性,做法
段三 回到B (A2)
段四 结尾 选择类 A or B
表态类(用死不表态法) A1 vs A2
段一
1.When it comes to the issue (phenomenon) of ……( tuition fee;TV effects), different people have radically different opinions. Some people hold onto the idea that ……. Other people ,however, deem that…….
2. As regards the issue of……,there is a popular discussion. Some people … Other people ,however,……
段二
开头:…… because of the following factors.
接下来和单向类的段二相同
段三
开头 By comparison,
A or B
In the similar way,

By contrast,
A1 VS A2
Quite on the contrary,
接下来和单向类段二相同
段四
表态类(死不表态法)
Just as any coin has two sides, it’s no exception with the issue of …. Actually the issue is just like a double-edged sword,and we should try every means to avoid its harmfulness while at the same time, making the most of its advantages.
选择类
As discussed above, each side has its advantages and disadvantages. If I’m allowed to make a decision, I prefer A to B ( B to A) , for the following reasons. On one hand,….. On the other hand,……
应试作文杀招 之二
四、图表类
此类作文是近年来的热点,但这类作文只有段一和前三类不同,其他都一样的来写.
每一幅图画(表),尤其是cartoon, 是要表达一个philosophy(哲理),因此,段一就是描述这一哲理的段落,但是描述的时候只用一到两句话来“轻描淡写”说出这个哲理即可。
近年来几乎考的都是cartoon,但是一定不要陷如误区以为要对cartoon进行大量的描写,象今年考的养老的cartoon,其实就两句话描述一下画面就马上引出你的结论,接着就开始拿问题类作文的格式一套,so easy!
段一:
一、“从这幅漫画中我们可以得出这样一个结论:……”
1.As can be seen from the cartoon,we are able to arrive at a conclusion that ……
2. As shown from the above picture, one point is obvious.

二、如果是graph作文,则一定会有数据,就一定会表现出一定的趋势(tendency,trend)
There has been a gradual(slow,sharp) increase(decrease) in the number (amount, size ) of ……over the past few years (decades).
There has been ……increase……of …….while there has been ……decrease ……of …..
将趋势描述出来后,再在graph上找出两个同类数据来支持我们的结论就ok了。不要将graph上的所有数据都列举出来。
段二,段三,段四就和单向或双向作文一模一样了。

三大扩展技巧——Flex
扩展技巧是帮助自己在没话可说的时候达到快速增加作文字数的最有效的方法,运用flex的目的就是想让文章长就长,爱短就短。因此可以熟练运用flex来控制字数。
一、Quotation 引用
就是随便找一个人出来,介绍他一番,引用他的话,然后说我就是这样想的。(大约增加50字)而且引用此人的话一定要用:“。。。。”这样的直接引语格式,直接用现在时的时态,避免自己在时态上出错。
To illustrate the point, let’s take a look at what President Bush said in an article: “……”.
二、Example 举例(可以通过天花乱坠的想象来达到)
如:只要一举例,凡是好事就说象my friend,Jerry,怎么怎么样;而凡是坏事就说象my neighbor 如何如何。
e.g. 2000年考研作文图画是为什么船多而鱼少了呢?
举例:我邻居20人,每人每天吃5条鱼,吃一年下来,可想而知道。据了解,有70%的中国家庭都是这么干的!(这几句用英文写出来,嘿嘿,你看看有多少字了?)
因此从上面这个例子你可以发现你在作文当中写的什么内容不要害怕其是否真实,因为内容改卷老师是不会留意的,你的目标就是把作文写的尽可能的长还有段首段尾的句子足够漂亮。
三、 Statistics 统计数字
就是随便找数字,成立一个统计结果,格式可以参考我们在问题类作文段一时候的举例。

最后强调:
1.上面用英文列出的句式一定要熟记背牢,当然,你再另外总结一些类似的句式,尤其是能大量用上考研单词的句式。
2.四类作文的结构要熟记,三大Flex要时时会用,常常是无法想象或没有东西可写的时候,Flex就要派上用场。
3.训练作文可以从12月上旬开始,就拿历年的考题来,先判断是哪类作文,然后用中文把整篇文章的结构先构思出来,如今年的cartoon,说的是养老足球赛,段一就简单描述一下画面马上引出,现在养老的问题得到社会的越来越多的重视,接着段二就开始分析为什么会出现儿女不愿意养老的原因,第一,第二,第三是因为什么什么,每一点原因进行扩展;段三就提出对策(因为是问题类作文)。
每次这样构思之后,就反复背和默写句式,因为平常虽然背的多,但要是不写一下,到了临场会很生疏的。
4.强调又强调:4、6级作文一定要写到200字左右,考研要写到280——300字左右才会拿高分。

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